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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do. knOR
Dear Mr. Musa, I am a full-time student at the school for the subject in Business English. The Faculty and the school staff have been very supportive in my endeavor which has enabled me to excel. Unfortunately, I have learned that the summer internship which was a part of the course has been canceled and it is a matter of concern. Although joining the school has benefited me in learning the professional language, the summer work placement was the main reason for me to enroll with the school. I was expecting to gain some industry experience which would enable me to have a better chance to secure a job. It's my humble request to reconsider the omitted program since it was an integrated part of the course. If, that is not possible please consider issuing credit for another subject. I strongly believe you will that into consideration my case and early wait for your reply. Yours Sincerely, Uzair.
Dear Mr.
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Musa
,

I am a full-time student at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
for the subject in Business English. The Faculty and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
staff have been
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
supportive in my endeavor which has enabled me to excel. Unfortunately, I have learned that the summer internship which was a part of the course has
been canceled
and it is a matter of concern.

Although joining the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
has benefited me in learning the professional language, the summer work placement was the main reason for me to enroll with the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
. I was expecting to gain
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Did you mean "industries"?
industry
experience which would enable me to have a better chance to secure a job.

It's my humble request to reconsider the omitted program since it was an integrated part of the course. If,
that is
not possible
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
consider issuing credit for another subject. I
strongly
believe you will that into consideration my case and early wait for your reply.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Uzair
.

IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: • state your reason for writing • describe the problem and your concerns • explain what you would like the Principal to do.

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