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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v. 3

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v. 3 a31o
Dear Sir or Madam, This is in response to the advertisement published by you in the magazine, The Australian Times, to look after your six-year old child. I am writing to you to express my interest in this job opportunity. I have an experience of around 20 years in baby-sitting and child care. I had been working at a day care of children for about 10 years, post which I lost my job due to the lockdown during the Covid pandemic. I also hold a diploma in the field of child care and nutrition and a certification related to child hygiene. I assure you that I will take good care of your toddler and won't give any chances of any complaints. Since I do not hold any other job right now, I will be totally committed to this job and will take care good care of your child. I have enclosed my experience letter, and a copy of other documents. I hope you will find me a suitable candidate for this job. Thanks in advance for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Somya
Dear Sir or Madam,

This is in response to the advertisement published by you in the magazine, The Australian Times, to look after your six-year
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old
child.

I am writing to you to express my interest in this
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job
opportunity. I have an experience of around 20 years in baby-sitting and child
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care
.
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I
had been working at a day
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care
of children for about 10 years, post which I lost my
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job
due to the lockdown during the
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Covid
pandemic.
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I
also
hold a diploma in the field of child
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care
and nutrition and a certification related to child hygiene.

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I
assure you that I will take
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good
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care
of your toddler and won't give any chances of any complaints. Since I do not hold any other
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job
right
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now
, I will be
totally
committed to this
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job
and will take
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care
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
care
of your child.

I have enclosed my experience letter, and a copy of other documents. I hope you will find me a suitable candidate for this
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job
. Thanks in advance for your consideration.

Yours
faithfully
,
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Somya
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. v. 3

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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