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You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Dear Mr. Adams, My name is Sara Leigh and I am a student of the Business English program at your language school. I am writing to express my concern over the cancelation of the summer work placement program. The summer work placement program, as advertised in your recruitment material, is “invaluable for students to gain their first professional experience in an English-speaking environment”. In fact, for myself, the work placement program is the most important differentiator from other language schools, and it was the very reason I chose to study here. Many students would say the same. With covid-19, it will be extremely difficult for students to secure a position without the help from the school. The cancelation of the program jeopardizes our future in New Zealand. Furthermore, I believe that the high tuition for the Business English program was only justified by the work placement service. I came to the school with the expectation that work placement would be offered. I do not believe that the school can legally cancel the program without compensation to their students. Here I would like to suggest two possible courses of actions. The preferred action is to work with the students and restart the work placement program. If in the unfortunate case that the program cannot be continued, please schedule a mass meeting with all the students involved to discuss our options- perhaps to receive a partial refund of our tuition. Thank you for your time reading this letter. While this situation is yet to be resolved, I do want to express my gratitude in the opportunities and education provided by your school so far. I hope that the school will continue to exceed our expectations and handle this summer work placement program with students’ best interest in mind. Best Regards, Sara Leigh
Dear Mr. Adams,

My name is Sara
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Leigh and
I am a
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of the Business English
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program
at your language
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school
. I am writing to express my concern over the
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cancelation
of the summer
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work
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placement
program.

The summer
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work
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placement
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program
, as advertised in your recruitment material, is “invaluable for
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students
to gain their
first
professional experience in an English-speaking environment”. In fact, for myself, the
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work
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placement
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program
is the most
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important
differentiator from other language
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schools
, and it was the
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very
reason I chose to study here.
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Many
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students
would say the same. With
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covid-19
, it will be
extremely
difficult for
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students
to secure a position without the
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help
from the
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school
. The
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cancelation
of the
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program
jeopardizes our future in New Zealand.

Furthermore
, I believe that the high tuition for the Business English
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program
was
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only
justified by the
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work
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placement
service. I came to the
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school
with the expectation that
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work
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placement
would
be offered
. I do not believe that the
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school
can
legally
cancel the
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program
without compensation to their students.

Here I would like to suggest two possible courses of actions. The preferred action is to
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work
with the
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students
and restart the
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work
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placement
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program
. If in the unfortunate case that the
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program
cannot
be continued
,
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please
schedule a mass meeting with all the
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students
involved to discuss our options- perhaps to receive a partial refund of our tuition.

Thank you for your time reading this letter. While this situation is
yet
to
be resolved
, I do want to express my gratitude in the opportunities and education provided by your
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school
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so
far. I hope that the
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school
will continue to exceed our expectations and handle this summer
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work
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placement
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program
with
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students’
best interest in mind.

Best Regards,

Sara Leigh
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IELTS letter You are a student at a language school in New Zealand studying Business English. Part of the course is a summer work placement programme. Unfortunately, you have just learnt from the school that this programme has now been cancelled. Write a letter to the School Principal. In your letter: state your reason for writing describe the problem and your concerns explain what you would like the Principal to do.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
299 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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