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You are a member of an organization which meets regularly at a particular

You are a member of an organization which meets regularly at a particular Kwle1
Dear Sir I am writing this letter to express my deep dissatisfaction regarding the services and the meal which was served yesterday during the Silver Jubilee celebration of our “Helping Hands” organisation. As a responsible member of the organisation, I would like to mention some lack of quality in your services yesterday. Even though we had booked our party hall before a month we were stalled outside waiting for the hall to get cleaned up at the last moment which was very inconvenient and disappointing. Secondly, the personnel of your restaurant acted so unprofessionally that one of our guests were embarrassed and had to leave the party early. In addition to that, the meal served was not fresh as a result to that some of our members fell sick in the morning. “Helping Hands” organisation would like to express our clear disappointment with the professionalism and service and would like to receive an apology letter for the bad service you offered us yesterday. Kindly look up on the issues mentioned above and I hope you take a serious action against these so that we can keep our relationship alive in the future. Yours sincerely XYZ
Dear Sir

I am writing this letter to express my deep dissatisfaction regarding the
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services
and the meal which
was served
yesterday during the Silver Jubilee celebration of our “Helping Hands”
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organisation
.

As a responsible member of the
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organisation
, I would like to mention
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some
lack of quality in your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
services
yesterday.
Even though
we had booked our party hall
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before
a month we
were stalled
outside waiting for the hall to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
cleaned up at the last moment which was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
inconvenient and disappointing.
Secondly
, the personnel of your restaurant acted
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
unprofessionally
that one of our guests
were embarrassed
and had to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
the party early.
In addition
to that, the meal served was not fresh
as a result
to that
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some
of our members fell sick in the morning.

“Helping Hands”
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organisation
would like to express our
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clear
disappointment with the professionalism and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
and would like to receive an apology letter for the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
service
you offered us yesterday. Kindly look up on the issues mentioned above and I hope you take a serious action against these
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that we can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
keep
our relationship alive in the future.

Yours
sincerely


XYZ
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IELTS letter You are a member of an organization which meets regularly at a particular

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
194 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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