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A letter to your manager for improving your work. You should describe the problems and how you can improve them.

A letter to your manager for improving your work. You should describe the problems and how you can improve them. YLwOm
Dear Angela, I am writing to suggest how we could improve our reception area and make it tidy and clean. Recently, we have received quite a lot of comments from our customers about the reception area. For example, they felt that our reception table is too high so it's not convenient for them to get help. Besides, there are so many advertisement leaflets on the table that one customer complained that the working condition was unorganised. I think that the reception area is important because our clients will have the first impression of our company when they come in. Also, the area represents the culture and services of our company; Thus, we have to pay enough attention to make it better. I’d like to advise that firstly, to replace the old one with a height-adjustable table; next, to rearrange the layout. For instance, the sidewall can post our rewards. Lastly, we should have a duty roster to maintain this area. I hope that my suggestions will help our company and I am looking forward to hearing from your feedback. Have a lovely day. Kind regards, Tanya
Dear Angela,

I am writing to suggest how we could
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improve
our
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reception
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area
and
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make
it tidy and clean.

Recently, we have received quite
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a lot of
comments from our customers about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
.
For example
, they felt that our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
reception
table is too high
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so
it's not convenient for them to
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get
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help
.
Besides
, there are
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so
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many
advertisement leaflets on the table that one customer complained that the working condition was
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unorganised
.

I
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think
that the
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reception
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
is
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important
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because
our clients will have the
first
impression of our
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company
when they
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come
in.
Also
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
area
represents the culture and services of our
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company
;
Thus
, we
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have to
pay
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enough
attention to
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make
it better.

I’d like to advise that
firstly
, to replace the
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old
one with a height-adjustable table;
next
, to rearrange the layout.
For instance
, the sidewall can post our rewards.
Lastly
, we should have a duty roster to maintain this area.

I hope that my suggestions will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
our
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company and
I am looking forward to hearing from your feedback.

Have a lovely day.

Kind regards,

Tanya
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IELTS letter A letter to your manager for improving your work. You should describe the problems and how you can improve them.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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