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You are a commuter. One morning on your way to work you suddenly fell ill and lost your consciousness. One gentleman on the same bus sent you to a hospital. Write a letter to the company where the gentleman works to extend your gratefulness

You are a commuter. One morning on your way to work you suddenly fell ill and lost your consciousness. One gentleman on the same bus sent you to a hospital. Write a letter to the company where the gentleman works to extend your gratefulness bYRrW

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing this letter to extend my sincere thanks to Mr Smith, the cashier of your company. Nowadays, I am a commuter and in daily basis I take a bus to go to my work. Last Monday morning when the bus suddenly broke down on the street and we waited there for along time. The day was too hot, so I felt dizzy and then I lost my consciousness. Then when I came to I found myself in Guarchjo Hospital, which is located in the city centre. The doctor Mr Brawn told me it was Mr Smith's assist who had sent me the amergency and informed my parents of my condition. Fortunately, Mr Smith was same bus with me. However I have never met him in my life. My parents and I were too grateful to Mr Smith for his kindness. Please forward my thanks to him and if Mr Smith was late for that morning, I'd like to compensate you. I do hope that the company would reward Mr Smith for his noble deeds. Your faithfully. Ann Brawn

Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing this letter to extend my sincere thanks to Mr You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartisan
Smith
, the cashier of your This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
.

Nowadays, I am a commuter and in daily basis I take a bus to go to my work. Last Monday morning when the bus Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphsuddenly.suddenly!suddenly?suddenly:suddenly,suddenly;
suddenly


This sentence does not start with an uppercase letterBroke
broke
 down on the Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).street, and
street and
 we waited there Did you mean "for a long time"?for a long time
for along time
. The day was too hot, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 I felt dizzy and then I lost my consciousness. Then when I came to I found myself in Possible spelling mistake found.Gaucho
Guarchjo
 Hospital, which is located
 in the city Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.center
centre
. The doctor Mr Brawn This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :informed
told
 me it was Mr Smith's assist who had This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmitted
sent
 me the Possible spelling mistake found.emergency
amergency
 and informed my parents of my condition. Fortunately
, Mr You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartisan
Smith
 was same bus with me. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?However,
However
 I have never met him in my life.

My parents and I were too grateful to Mr You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartisan
Smith
 for his kindness. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 forward my thanks to him and if Mr You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartisan
Smith
 was late for that morning, I'd like to compensate you. I do hope that the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 would reward Mr You use this word too often, consider replacing it withartisan
Smith
 for his noble deeds.

Your faithfully
.

Ann Brawn

IELTS letter You are a commuter. One morning on your way to work you suddenly fell ill and lost your consciousness. One gentleman on the same bus sent you to a hospital. Write a letter to the company where the gentleman works to extend your gratefulness

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

183 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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