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You applied for and paid to attend a series of three work-related seminars due to begin next week. Unfortunately you have just received news that our father has been taken ill suddenly and you will have to return home to Hong Kong to see him. Ou are disappointed as the seminars would have been very helpful to your career and you were looking forward to attending. Write to the seminar organizers and advise them of your inability to attend. Express your disappointment, apologize and ask whether you can attend the seminar at a later date. If there are no more seminars this year, ask for a refund.

You applied for and paid to attend a series of three work-related seminars due to begin next week. Unfortunately you have just received news that our father has been taken ill suddenly and you will have to return home to Hong Kong to see him. Ou are disappointed as the seminars would have been very helpful to your career and you were looking forward to attending. Write to the seminar organizers and advise them of your inability to attend. Express your disappointment, apologize and ask whether you can attend the seminar at a later date. If there are no more seminars this year, ask for a refund. jLYa
Dear Sir I am a student from Hong Kong who applied for your carrier improvement workshop under the registration number 78534, commenscing to start from next week. I regret to inform you that I could not participate the coures as I planned because, I have to return to my home due to sudden ailment of my father. This seminar is very resourcefull to people like me, who egarly work to climb through the cooperate ladder, so I kindly appologize from you for this unavoidable situation. Although I paid the full amount of the course fee, I would like to request from you to reserve me the oppertunity to take part in the next seminar. If there is not any courses available for this year shedule, please refund the money which I already paid as soon as possible, in terms mentioned in the course registration form, . I attached my bank account details here with. I look forward to hear from you. Your faithfully Hasith Seniya Tennakoon
Dear Sir

I am a student from Hong Kong who applied for your carrier improvement workshop under the registration number 78534,
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coures
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because
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have to
return to my home due to sudden ailment of my father.

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very
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resourcefull
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people
like me, who
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work to climb through
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ladder,
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I kindly
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appologize
from you for this unavoidable situation. Although I paid the full amount of the course fee, I would like to request from you to reserve me the
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oppertunity
to
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take part
in the
next
seminar.

If there is not any courses available for this year
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shedule
,
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please
refund the money which I already paid as
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soon
as possible, in terms mentioned in the course registration form
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, .
I attached my bank account
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details
here with.

I look forward
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to hear
from you.

Your
faithfully


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Seniya
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Tennakoon

IELTS letter You applied for and paid to attend a series of three work-related seminars due to begin next week. Unfortunately you have just received news that our father has been taken ill suddenly and you will have to return home to Hong Kong to see him. Ou are disappointed as the seminars would have been very helpful to your career and you were looking forward to attending. Write to the seminar organizers and advise them of your inability to attend. Express your disappointment, apologize and ask whether you can attend the seminar at a later date. If there are no more seminars this year, ask for a refund.

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