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You saw an advert in newspaper asking for volunteer to help run a charity event write anletter of application to the organiser in your letter explain why you interested in give detail of suitable past experience suggest ways you might help with eventa

You saw an advert in newspaper asking for volunteer to help run a charity event write anletter of application to the organiser in your letter explain why you interested in give detail of suitable past experience suggest ways you might help with eventa 02A1
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing this letter with regard to take part in your charity event in next month. Since I was a child, I have been extremely passionate about helping people around me. Whenever I saw a kid hurt himself around me, I always be the first one run toward him and provide assistance. Helping other people always give me the most satisfaction. I still remember that when I was attending middle school, I spent most of my time provide household services for single elderly people during summer vacation. By helping those people with their daily living matters, it helped me realize how many people were suffering from difficulties in life and how lucky we are to have a normal life. Since I have a art design back ground, I can help you design various patterns of pamphlet and distribute them around the neighbour. I always believe that charity always have the lowest attention in the society and we need to in crease the awareness of people that how many people are in need among us. I look forward hearing from you. JunLiang Guo
Dear Sir or Madam

I am writing this letter with regard to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in your charity
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
in
next
month.

Since I was a child, I have been
extremely
passionate about helping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
around me. Whenever I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a kid hurt himself around me, I
The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'be'.
always be
the
first
one run toward him and provide assistance. Helping other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
always give me the most satisfaction.

I
still
remember that when I was attending middle school, I spent most of my time provide household services for single elderly
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
during summer vacation. By helping those
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
with their daily living matters, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me realize how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
were suffering from difficulties in life and how lucky we are to have a normal life.

Since I have
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
art design back ground, I can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
you design various patterns of pamphlet and distribute them around the
Possible spelling mistake. 'neighbour' is British English.
neighbour
. I always believe that charity always have the lowest attention in the
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
society and
we need to in crease the awareness of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that how
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
are in need among us.

I look forward hearing from you.

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JunLiang
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Guo
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IELTS letter You saw an advert in newspaper asking for volunteer to help run a charity event write anletter of application to the organiser in your letter explain why you interested in give detail of suitable past experience suggest ways you might help with eventa

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  American English
7 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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