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You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it y0Xg
Dear Jhon, I am writing this in order to attain your attention for my placement in our main branch in Canada. Let me explain whole scenario to you in details. I intend to work for main branch for six months because it would provide me with work experience in a diverse country. I am asking this favour as my main duties are relevant to customers dealing who are Canada based. By directly working there, it would enhance my ability to focus on my work fully as I can arrange physical meetings with our clients instead of visual ones that I do here. In addition, by appointing me in main office there will be no loss of my work instead my progress will improve. I hope, by considering all above circumstances, you will help me to arrange my placement by opening a new position or by transferring me with existing post. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. yours faithfully,
Dear
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Jhon
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I am writing this in order to attain your attention for my placement in our
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main
branch in Canada.
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Let
me
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explain
whole scenario to you in
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details
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I intend to
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work
for
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main
branch for six months
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because
it would provide me with
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work
experience in a diverse country. I am asking this
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favour
as my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
duties are relevant to customers dealing who are Canada based. By
directly
working there, it would enhance my ability to focus on my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
fully
as I can arrange physical meetings with our clients
instead
of visual ones that I do here.

In addition
, by appointing me in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
main
office there will be no loss of my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
work
instead
my progress will
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improve
.

I hope, by considering all above circumstances, you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me to arrange my placement by opening a new position or by transferring me with existing post.

Looking forward to hearing from you
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soon
.

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yours
faithfully
,

IELTS letter You work for an international company, and would like to spend six months working in its head office in another country. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter • explain why you want to work in the company's head office for six months • say how your work could be done while you are away • ask for his/her help in arranging it

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  American English
7 paragraphs
159 words
6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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