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You and your family just renet an apartment and one or two problems occured.

You and your family just renet an apartment and one or two problems occured. BM6Aw

Dear Sir, it is known that we bought an apartment for rent from you and we liked this apartment at first, but after last week's earthquake, everything went wrong and everything in the house did not work. The other day, while my brother was washing in the bathroom, the lights and water went out and even my brother could not understand what had happened, and it should be remembered that some of the air conditioners in the rooms did not work well. After all, it's terrible, everything was working well before that. Not only that, yesterday I was drying my hair in a hair dryer and I was in a hurry to work so suddenly the light went out and I could not dry my hair well and I was late for work. All of this is unbearably bad. And I want to ask you that if you don’t fix these in these two days or return our money, we’ll be looking for another better home. I hope you will resolve the matter to our satiffaction. Yours faithfully, Alina Granger

Dear Sir, it is known
 that we This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 an apartment for rent from you and we liked this apartment at first
, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:on the contrary
but
 after last week's earthquake, everything went This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
wrong
 and everything in the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :residence
house
 did not You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
. The other day, while my brother was washing in the bathroom, the lights and water went out and even my brother could not understand what had happened, and it should be remembered
 that If the text is a generality, 'of the' is not necessary. Did you mean "some"?some
some of the
 air conditioners in the rooms did not You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
. After all
, it's terrible, everything was working You use this word too often, consider replacing it withstrongtogether
well
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before
 that. Not This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exclusively
only
 that, yesterday I was drying my hair in a hair Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).dryer, and
dryer and
 I was in a hurry to You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
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so
suddenly
 the light went out and I could not dry my hair Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).well, and
well and
 I was late for You use this word too often, consider replacing it withtaskindustrytrialjobproductionstruggle
work
. All of this is unbearably
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :evil
bad
. And I want to ask you that if you don’t This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :rectify
fix
 these in these two days or return our money, we’ll be looking for another better home. I hope you will resolve the matter to our Possible spelling mistake found.satisfaction
satiffaction
. Yours faithfully
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