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You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there.

You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there. OlWBj
Dear Mr. Williams, My family and I plan to relocate to a new country and require your assistance in taking a home for rent. I am a software engineer and my wife is a doctor. We have two kids of age 10 and 12. My parent will be accompanying me to new country. I would prefer a house in-spite of a flat. Keeping the family members in mind I require a two-story house having minimum three bathrooms, three rooms and a kitchen. I would be better if can have a garden. Coming to the location I would go for a location where a school, a park and a hospital are in the vicinity. My office is situated in the cyber park so if a property with above mentioned location can be found near the cyber park then it will be great. Internet speed should be good in the area this will be helpful in case of work from home. Looking forward for your assistance. RegardsJoy
Dear Mr. Williams, My family and I plan to relocate to a new country and require your assistance in taking a home for rent. I am a software engineer and my wife is a doctor. We have two kids of age 10 and 12. My parent will be accompanying me to new country.

I would prefer a
house
in-spite of a flat. Keeping the family members in mind I require a two-story
house
having minimum three bathrooms, three rooms and a kitchen. I would be better if can have a garden.

Coming to the location I would go for a location where a school, a park and a hospital are in the vicinity. My office
is situated
in the cyber park
so
if a property with above mentioned location can
be found
near the cyber park then it will be great. Internet speed should be
good
in the area this will be helpful in case of work from home.

Looking forward for your assistance.

RegardsJoy
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IELTS letter You and your family are moving to another country, and you are looking for rented accommodation there.

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
164 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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