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English learning at overseas school

English learning at overseas school K0E73
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Pawan Nanwani from Pune, India. I got recently registered with your school for English Literature course for the year 2020-21. I want to get some information about the accommodation of the college because my preference is to get the accommodation very close to the school so as to avoid the travel time. I want to utilize the travel time in learning more and new things. I really appreciate if you can send me the information about the accommodation and details of the school that would be great and helpful. Yours Faithfully, Pawan
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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Pawan
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Nanwani
from Pune, India. I
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got
recently registered with your school for English Literature course for the year 2020-21.
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I
want to
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get
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some
information about the accommodation of the college
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because
my preference is to
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get
the accommodation
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very
close to the school
'So as to' expresses purpose and is used in formal texts. Consider using "to"
so as to
avoid the travel time.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
want to utilize the travel time in learning more and new things.

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I
really
appreciate if you can
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send
me the information about the accommodation and
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details
of the school that would be great and helpful.

Yours
Faithfully
,
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Pawan
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IELTS letter English learning at overseas school

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
97 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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