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Email to Tim about visiting education fair

Email to Tim about visiting education fair e36bA
Hi Tim, I am glad that you are interested to visit the education fair as I am planning to go too! I am available this week, so I can join you and your cousins to this education fair. I think there are many courses that I am interested to get information about as I am still hesitating on which course I would choose to pursue and I am not really clear about which college would best suits me, which is also my main purpose for this time of education fair visit. The courses that I am currently quite interested in including architecture, computer science, software engineering and accounting, so I would certainly ask about these few courses. How about you? Do you find any courses that you are interested in? I am not considering about studying abroad currently due to the worsening crisis of pandemic. I think it’s not a good idea to study abroad for now as the Covid-19 Delta variant is very infectious and the risk of infecting the disease is getting very high as well. Regarding the vocational courses, I would like to sign up for them as well. I am looking forward to learn new skill from these courses together with you. See you soon! Gary
Hi Tim,

I am glad that you are
interested
to visit the education
fair
as I am planning to go too! I am available this week,
so
I can
join
you and your cousins to this education
fair
.

I
think
there are
many
courses
that I am
interested
to
get
information about as I am
still
hesitating on which
course
I would choose to
pursue and
I am not
really
clear
about which college would best suits me, which is
also
my main purpose for this time of education
fair
visit. The
courses
that I am
currently
quite
interested
in including architecture, computer science, software engineering and accounting,
so
I would
certainly
ask about these few
courses
. How about you? Do you find any
courses
that you are
interested
in?

I am not
considering about studying
abroad
currently
due to the worsening crisis of pandemic. I
think
it’s not a
good
idea
to study abroad for
now
as the Covid-19 Delta variant is
very
infectious and the
risk
of infecting the disease is getting
very
high
as well
.

Regarding the vocational
courses
, I would like to
sign
up for them
as well
. I am looking forward
to learn
new
skill
from these
courses
together with you.

See
you
soon
!

Gary
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6.0
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