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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved 275J
Dear Sir / Madam I am Alay Desai, second year student in Masters of computer application course and a frequent user of our college’s cafeteria during lunch time. I am writing this letter to raise few concerns that I think could be some pointers that can improve our cafeteria. Firstly, I think we all can use some more banches and sitting area as it gets crowded during lunch time and people avoid the cafeteria because of that. Also, we can add some more staff during lunch time so that everyone can get a chance to buy food before our lunch break is over. Further, I can see people throwing waste all around the cafeteria which can be controlled by putting more signes to clean the benches and surrounding after use for others. Finally I would like to say that we all love to hangout in our cafeteria and it holds a special place in our hearts as it holds lots of golden memories. But recently it is loosing its charm due to poor quality and lack of services. Hence I hope we can have some changes in our cafeteria to bring it back to life. Yours Faithfully Alay Desai
Dear Sir / Madam

I am
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Alay
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Desai
, second year student in Masters of computer application course and a frequent user of our college’s
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cafeteria
during
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lunch time
.

I am writing this letter to raise few concerns that I
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think
could be
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some
pointers that can
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improve
our cafeteria.

Firstly
, I
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think
we all can
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use
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some
more
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banches
and sitting area as it
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gets
crowded during
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lunch time
and
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people
avoid the
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cafeteria
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because
of that.
Also
, we can
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add
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some
more staff during
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lunch time
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so
that everyone can
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get
a chance to
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buy
food
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before
our lunch break is over.

Further
, I can
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see
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people
throwing waste all around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
which can
be controlled
by putting more
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signes
to clean the benches and surrounding after
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use
for others.

Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Finally
I would like to say that we all
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love
The verb 'hang out' is spelled as two words. The noun 'hangout' is spelled as one.
to hangout
in our
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cafeteria
and it holds a special place in our hearts as it holds lots of golden memories.
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But
recently it is loosing its charm due to poor quality and lack of services.

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Hence
I hope we can have
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some
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changes
in our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
to bring it back to life.

Yours
Faithfully


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IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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198 words
6.0
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