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Writing Practice 30301 B2 A group of customers from Asia are visiting your headquarters. Write a letter to your manager with a planned programme for the visit. - details should include: o which staff members, and why, should accompany the visitors o the product/services which the customers wish to see. o the kinds of activities (business and non-business) which should be organised for the visit Please write your report on the paper provided. Write your answer in between 150-180 words. You will be graded on layout, structure, language use and vocabulary range.

Writing Practice 30301 B2 A group of customers from Asia are visiting your headquarters. Write a letter to your manager with a planned programme for the visit. - details should include: o which staff members, and why, should accompany the visitors o the product/services which the customers wish to see. o the kinds of activities (business and non-business) which should be organised for the visit Please write your report on the paper provided. Write your answer in between 150-180 words. You will be graded on layout, structure, language use and vocabulary range. e3087
Dear Mr John, I am writing this letter with the purpose of outlining the programme I have prepared for the upcoming visit of some Asian customers. To begin with, I believe that our customers should be accompanied by the head of H&R. In fact, that woman is extremely good at dealing with people and I think she will treat our guests in a magnificent way. Secondly, this visit represents an opportunity to show our clients something that belongs only to us. Therefore, I planned a tour in our factories to show the production process so that our customer can understand all the steps that are beyond our product. To conclude, I think that it would be great to enjoy a typical Italian dinner all together. Thus, our costumers will not only enjoy their trip, but they will also feel part of an international family which will increase our brand loyalty. I will be available if you need any help to organize the day. I am looking forward to receiving a response in the near future, Francesco Paganelli
Dear Mr John,

I am writing this letter with the purpose of outlining the
Possible spelling mistake. 'programme' is British English.
programme
I have prepared for the upcoming visit of
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
Asian customers.

To
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
with, I believe that our customers should
be accompanied
by the head of
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H&R
. In fact, that woman is
extremely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
at dealing with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
she will treat our guests
Consider replacing "in a magnificent way" with the adverb for "magnificent"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a magnificent way
.

Secondly
, this visit represents an opportunity to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
our clients something that belongs
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
to us.
Therefore
, I planned a tour in our factories to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
show
the production process
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that our customer can understand all the steps that are beyond our product.

To conclude
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
that it would be great to enjoy a typical Italian dinner all together.
Thus
, our costumers will not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
enjoy their trip,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
they will
also
feel part of an international family which will increase our brand loyalty.

I will be available if you need any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to organize the day.

I am looking forward to receiving a response in the near future,

Francesco
Possible spelling mistake found.
Paganelli

IELTS letter Writing Practice 30301 B2 A group of customers from Asia are visiting your headquarters. Write a letter to your manager with a planned programme for the visit. - details should include: o which staff members, and why, should accompany the visitors o the product/services which the customers wish to see. o the kinds of activities (business and non-business) which should be organised for the visit Please write your report on the paper provided. Write your answer in between 150-180 words. You will be graded on layout, structure, language use and vocabulary range.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
176 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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