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From David, Subject: touring holiday Some college friends of mine are visiting your area soon for a week’s touring holiday. They would like to travel around and learn about your local area and its history. Can you tell me about some of places they could visit? What is the best way to travel around-car, bike or coach? Thanks, David

From David, Subject: touring holiday Some college friends of mine are visiting your area soon for a week’s touring holiday. They would like to travel around and learn about your local area and its history. Can you tell me about some of places they could visit? What is the best way to travel around-car, bike or coach? Thanks, David JKRYE
Dear David, I am cheerful to know your classmates are going to travel to my city for a week. I am writing to give several suggestions in regards their vacation. I am extremely proud of introducing Ha Noi city which is the capital of Vietnam. This place is famous for history of thousands of years. If your friends want to know about history of the city, there will be some destinations such as Hoan Kiem lake, Ba Dinh quare, Mot Cot pagoda and so on. In other words, they could try traditional food are sold on the sidewalk. In my opinion, bicycle is the most vehicle to travel around the city. As cycling is not only benefical for their health, but also abate air pollution. Besides, passengers visit Hanoi which should not miss the experience of cycling around West lake to sight-seeing the large space. It is easy for them to rent bicycles with cheap price. What do you think about my suggestion? I hope that it could be useful for your friends. If you need me help anything else, please contact me. I look forward to receiving your response. Yours sincerely, Mary
Dear David,

I am cheerful to know your classmates are going to travel to my city for a week. I am writing to give several suggestions in regards their vacation.

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am
extremely
proud of introducing Ha
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Noi
city which is the capital of Vietnam. This place is
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famous
for history of thousands of years. If your friends want to know about history of the city, there will be
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some
destinations such as
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Hoan
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Kiem
lake, Ba
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Dinh
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quare
, Mot Cot pagoda and
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on.
In other words
, they could try traditional food
are sold
on the sidewalk.

In my opinion, bicycle is the most vehicle to travel around the city. As cycling is not
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only
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benefical
for their health,
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but
also
abate air pollution.
Besides
, passengers visit Hanoi which should not miss the experience of cycling around West lake to sight-seeing the large space. It is easy for them to rent bicycles with
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cheap
price.

What do you
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think
about my suggestion? I hope that it could be useful for your friends. If you need me
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help
anything else,
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please
contact me.

I look forward to receiving your response.

Yours
sincerely
,

Mary

IELTS letter From David, Subject: touring holiday Some college friends of mine are visiting your area soon for a week’s touring holiday. They would like to travel around and learn about your local area and its history. Can you tell me about some of places they could visit? What is the best way to travel around-car, bike or coach? Thanks, David

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