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writing a letter to a friend you borrowed something

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Dear Mary, Sorry it’s taken me so long to write to you but at last I put pen to paper to explain why I haven’t returned that DIY book I borrowed from you. To be honest, I’ve been feeling so guilty that I delayed writing to you. I have to own up that I damaged the book accidentally. I’m so very sorry. I know how important that book is to you as it was passed down from your late father. What happened is that I had been reading up on the chapter about DIY plumbing when I knocked over my cup of coffee which splashed all over the book. Most of the stain is on the pages that were open at the time. I’ve sent the book away to be repaired. I didn’t realise that was even possible until I researched it. Anyway, it should be as good as new when I get it back next week and then I’ll send it on to you. Again, I’m so sorry for the delay in telling you. I hope you can forgive me. Best wishes, Sarah
Dear Mary,

Sorry it’s taken me
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so
long to write to you
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but
at last I put pen to paper to
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explain
why I haven’t returned that DIY
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book
I borrowed from you.

To be honest, I’ve been feeling
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so
guilty that I delayed writing to you. I
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have to
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own
up that I damaged the
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book
accidentally
. I’m
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so
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very
sorry.
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I
know how
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important
that
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book
is to you as it
was passed
down from your late father.

What happened is that I had been reading up on the chapter about DIY plumbing when I knocked over my cup of coffee which splashed all over the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
. Most of the stain is on the pages that were open at the time.

I’ve
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sent
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
book
away to
be repaired
. I didn’t
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realise
that was even possible until I researched it. Anyway, it should be as
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good
as new when I
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get
it back
next
week and then I’ll
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send
it on to you.

Again, I’m
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so
sorry for the delay in telling you. I hope you can forgive me.

Best wishes,

Sarah

IELTS letter writing a letter to a friend you borrowed something

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
183 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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