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Writer a letter telling your friend about your good news.What is it.Why does it effects your life.Invite him /her over for celebration.

Dear Raman, Hope this letter you in radiant Heath and the best of spirits. I M writing this letter to give you the good news that I have got job in London “desire Mapping”company with the high pay scale. I would like to celebrate this good new with you as your my close friend. You know I was dream I want to do jon in London as it is superb beautiful city. Besides that, Desire mapping is big company in whole world. I had been tried for getting job in this company since five years. But on the 27th March, I got email regarding job. Really, I felt happy. This is big opportunity for my betterment life. As there are eight hundred employees are working. Moreover, There are weather also nice. I will be leaving next month, but before going I would like to together with friends. Thus I did arrange party on 17 March at home. The party would be incomplete without your presence. I hope you will reach at time. Your lovingly, Ram
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Raman
, Hope this letter you in radiant Heath and the best of spirits. I M writing this letter to give you the
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good
news that I have
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got
job in London “desire Mapping”
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company
with the high pay scale. I would like to celebrate this
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good
new with you as your my close friend. You know I was dream I want to do
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jon
in London as it is superb
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beautiful
city.
Besides
that, Desire mapping is
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big
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company
in whole world. I had
been tried
for getting job in this
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company
Did you mean "for"? ('since' refers to a point in time, whereas 'for' refers to a period)
since
five years.
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But
on the 27th March, I
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got
email regarding job.
Really
, I felt happy. This is
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big
opportunity for my betterment life.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
there are eight hundred employees are working.
Moreover
, There are weather
also
nice. I will be leaving
next
month,
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but
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before
going I would like to together with friends.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Thus
I did arrange party on 17 March at home. The party would be incomplete without your presence. I hope you will reach at time. Your
lovingly
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Ram

IELTS letter Writer a letter telling your friend about your good news. What is it. Why does it effects your life. Invite him /her over for celebration.

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  American English
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174 words
5.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 5.5
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