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Write to a hotel and book a room

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Hi Sir or Mandam, I am writing this letter to book a room at your hotel and to get more information on the places of interest and different activities nearby. I will be arriving with my friends to celebrate my birthday on 4th of November, and leaving on the 7th of November afternoon. Therefore we will stay for 4 days in your hotel. We have six people. So I am looking to book three double rooms with the attached bathroom and great view to the seaside. Would you please tell me the service includes breakfast? Furthermore, I would also like to know if there are any historical sites nearby where we can explore more about the place’s history. I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance. Yours faithfully, Nguyet.
Hi Sir or
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Mandam
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I am writing this letter to book a room at your hotel and to
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get
more information on the places of interest and
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different
activities nearby.

I will be arriving with my friends to celebrate my birthday on 4th of November, and leaving on the 7th of November afternoon.
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Therefore
we will stay for 4 days in your hotel. We have six
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people
.
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So
I am looking to book three double rooms with the attached bathroom and great view to the seaside. Would you
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please
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tell
me the service includes breakfast?

Furthermore
, I would
also
like to know if there are any historical sites nearby where we can explore more about the place’s history.

I look forward to hearing from you and thank you in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

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Nguyet
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IELTS letter Write to a hotel and book a room

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
133 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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