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write an invitation to your friend for your family party

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Dear Joannah. I am writing to tell you about a party event I am organizing for the evening of Saturday 3rd July. This party is for my little daughter's birthday. She is very kind and romantic, so she likes different shows and unmissed actions. Such for reasons I invite you to this family party, because, I liked your son's birthday party, which you organized last month. I saw a lot of pleasant situations, in spite of you were ill you organized very well. For instance, I do liked the giving presents and cutting cake times, I thought your son was so happy with you, that were your kind of presents. Consequently, all your guests were happy too. Provided that, I wish you will help me to organise and control the party at this day, also I want my children, my guests and my husband, especially my "sweet princess " will be happy and wonder. Oh dear me, think about the dress for girls please. Hope you can come to our party. See you soon, Sarah.
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I am organizing for the evening of Saturday 3rd July.

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is for my
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daughter's birthday. She is
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kind and romantic,
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, I liked your son's birthday
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, which you organized last month. I
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pleasant situations,
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happy with you, that were your kind of presents.
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at this day,
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sweet princess
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will be happy and wonder. Oh dear me,
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about the dress for girls
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Sarah.
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IELTS letter write an invitation to your friend for your family party

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  American English
8 paragraphs
175 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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