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Hi John, I am writing concerning a couple of unfortunate incidents that happened to me on the premise of our unit. I've faced so many racial comments from my colleague Smith. Initially, I ignored hoping he would stop but, he keeps on repeating it. Additionally, I get know that two other colleagues also bullied by him in spite of several warnings from our team. These episodes occurred mostly on Mondays before my shift starts in the cafeteria. the recent one being on January 9th at about 11 am on the ground floor production unit, he started bullying me for another colleague mistake, even though I'm explaining everything so clearly. Consequently, I warned him that I'm going to complain about his unwarranted and unprovoked attitude. Furthermore, you can ask my shift colleagues regarding his behavior and from victims who also faced similar racial comments. I hope you will look into this matter and bring Smith to the book. I thank you in anticipation. Regards, Ram
Hi John,

I am writing concerning a couple of unfortunate incidents that happened to me on the premise of our unit. I've faced
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racial comments from my
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know that two other
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bullied by him
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in spite of
several warnings from our team.

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on Mondays
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my shift
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in the cafeteria.
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the
recent one being on January 9th at about 11 am on the
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ground floor
production unit, he
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started
bullying me for another
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colleague
mistake,
even though
I'm explaining everything
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so
clearly
.
Consequently
, I warned him that I'm going to complain about his unwarranted and unprovoked attitude.

Furthermore
, you can ask my shift
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colleagues
regarding his behavior and from victims who
also
faced similar racial comments. I hope you will look into this matter and bring Smith to the book. I thank you in anticipation. Regards, Ram

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