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Write a letter to your supervisor regarding a course you attended as a part of your job. Write - The purpose of your letter - Say how the course was useful to you - What are your suggestions regarding the course.

Write a letter to your supervisor regarding a course you attended as a part of your job. Write - The purpose of your letter - Say how the course was useful to you - What are your suggestions regarding the course. 85qBP
Dear Richard I am Elaine and I am working as Dental Surgeon in your hospital. I am telling about the course of Implantology which I studied recently. I request you to order a Physio-dispenser equipment which Is used in placing a Implant to the patient. However, this equipment is not available in our country and can be bought only from the Germany and UK. This course was extremely useful because it has given the depth knowldege of selection and inserting the Implant. In addition to it, the tutor was experienced person and he gave thousands of Implants in his clinic. Moreover, the certificate has been also provided by him. According to me, this course should be organized again as only a few people were attended it. But now, all my friends who are working in Dentistry would be invited to join the lectures if it is re-organized. I hope to hear you soon. Yours Sincerely Dr. Elaine.
Dear Richard

I am
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Elaine and
I am working as Dental Surgeon in your hospital. I am telling about the course of
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Implantology
which I studied recently.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
request you to order a Physio-dispenser equipment which Is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
in placing
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
Implant to the patient.
However
, this equipment is not available in our country and can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
from the Germany and UK.

This course was
extremely
useful
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because
it has
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
the depth
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knowldege
of selection and inserting the Implant.
In addition
to it, the tutor
was experienced
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
person and
he gave thousands of Implants in his clinic.
Moreover
, the certificate has been
also
provided by him.

This phrase can sound awkward in English. Consider using "in my opinion" or "I think".
According to me
, this course should
be organized
again as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
a few
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
were attended
it.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
But
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
, all my friends who are working in Dentistry would
be invited
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
the lectures if it is re-organized.

I hope to hear you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Yours
Sincerely


Dr. Elaine.

IELTS letter Write a letter to your supervisor regarding a course you attended as a part of your job. Write - The purpose of your letter - Say how the course was useful to you - What are your suggestions regarding the course.

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
157 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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