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You want to be employed as a manager for Skiing Holiday Resort. Give possible informations about yourself.

You want to be employed as a manager for Skiing Holiday Resort. Give possible informations about yourself. BJ65m
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for a place at Hotel Manager at a popular ski resort. I have successfully completed the course in economics at college. And I have a degree of computer systems and programming. I also know four languages such as: Turkish, English, Russian and German. For the last years I have been working as a manager in a countryside restaurant. Having moved your city, I got interested in your resort. I have some good personal qualities. I am sociable and I like working with people who are foreigners, because when I communicate in another language which I know I have a chance to improve my experience of knowing languages. Getting obtained medical knowledge I am able to help people who need medical care. I am capable of designing buildings, so should you employ me I will try to do my best for prospering your hotel. I believe that I would be an ideal candidate for the position you outlined. I enclose details of my education and abilities in the hope that you will consider me for entry. Yours faithfully, Mrs. Anastasia.
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to apply for a place at Hotel Manager at a popular ski resort. I have
successfully
completed the course in economics at college. And I have a degree of computer systems and programming. I
also
know four languages such as: Turkish, English, Russian and German. For the last years I have been working as a manager in a countryside restaurant. Having
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moved
your city, I
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got
interested in your resort. I have
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some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
personal qualities. I am sociable and I like working with
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people
who are foreigners,
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because
when I communicate in another language which I know I have a chance to
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improve
my experience of knowing languages. Getting obtained medical knowledge I am able to
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help
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
who need medical care. I am capable of designing buildings,
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so
should you employ me I will try to do my best for prospering your hotel. I believe that I would be an ideal candidate for the position you outlined.
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I
enclose
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details
of my education and abilities in the hope that you will consider me for entry. Yours
faithfully
, Mrs. Anastasia.
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IELTS letter You want to be employed as a manager for Skiing Holiday Resort. Give possible informations about yourself.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
186 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 6.5
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