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Write a letter to your managing director for transfer in head office Switzerland.

Write a letter to your managing director for transfer in head office Switzerland. GNdDg
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to apply for a temporary posting at Nestle head office in Switzerland. Currently, I am working as a production manager in Nestle, Head office, Karachi, Pakistan. I have extensive experience of ten years in the production line at different segments. In previous years, We have successfully launched many children cereal foods in the Pakistan market which are the flagship in the market share, but we are facing many limitations that we have to utilize pre-processed imported material in the production line. So, We cannot further diversify the bases up to the level as developed countries are doing in the output line. If I am allowed to upskill in state of the art production line head office, I would be able to set up a similar new plant in Pakistan and the company can improve its profit by reducing its import expenses and increase its production by utilising cheap labour available in Pakistan. My team is fully competent to handle the production line effectively in my absence. However, I will stay connected to them remotely as all of our company data is available to employees in cloud computing. Kindly, Approve my request for training in head office, so that my arrangements can be made timely and I don't face any hurdle in handing over the responsibilities to my team. looking forward to receiving a response earliest convenience. your's faithfully, Jack daniel
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to apply for a temporary posting at Nestle head
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office
in Switzerland.
Currently
, I am working as a
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production
manager in Nestle, Head
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office
, Karachi, Pakistan. I have extensive experience of ten years in the
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production
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line
at
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different
segments.

In previous years, We have
successfully
launched
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many
children cereal foods in the Pakistan market which are the flagship in the market share,
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but
we are facing
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many
limitations that we
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have to
utilize
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pre-processed
imported material in the
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production
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line
.
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So
, We cannot
further
diversify the bases up to the level as
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developed countries
are doing in the output
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line
. If I am
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allowed
to upskill in
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state of the art
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production
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line
head
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office
, I would be able to set up a similar new plant in Pakistan and the
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company
can
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improve
its profit by reducing its import expenses and increase its
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production
by
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utilising
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cheap
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labour
available in Pakistan.

My team is
fully
competent to handle the
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production
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line
effectively
in my absence.
However
, I will stay connected to them
remotely
as all of our
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
data is available to employees in cloud computing.

Kindly, Approve my request for training in head
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office
,
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so
that my arrangements can
be made
timely and I don't face any hurdle in handing over the responsibilities to my team.

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looking
forward to receiving a response
A determiner is probably missing here: "the earliest".
earliest
convenience.

Did you mean "your" or "yours"?
your's
faithfully
,

Jack
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daniel
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your managing director for transfer in head office Switzerland.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
236 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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