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Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say -Describe the problem - How it is affecting your work -What needs to be done about it

Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say -Describe the problem - How it is affecting your work -What needs to be done about it Pp9g
Dear manager I am writing you this letter to draw your attention toward a problem I am constantly encountering with my computer. Allow me to explain the issues I am facing in details. Firstly, the windows installed on my device is outdated and this is setting the job behind because some features are missing such as linking Two programs together. Secondly, each time I log in to my account on the apothicare (it's the new system we installed lately ) in order to book an appointment a message pops up saying I'm entering the wrong password although i'm pretty sure it's the correct one. Furthermore, once logged in it's taking ages for me to be able to actually reserve an appointment. Because of that, clients are complaining about the long period of time needed to book a service at our place. This being said, could you please send a specialist from the IT department to fix the hassle I'm facing as soon as possible, the reason why is that i think it's effecting the number of booking we are taking per day. Please let me know when we could resolve this problem. Looking forward for your reply. may wazzan.
Dear manager I am writing you this letter to draw your attention toward a problem I am
constantly
encountering with my computer.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
the issues I am facing in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
.
Firstly
, the windows installed on my device
is outdated
and this is setting the job behind
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
features are missing such as linking Two programs together.
Secondly
, each time I log in to my account on the
Possible spelling mistake found.
apothicare
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
(it's
the new system we installed lately
Don't put a space before the closing parenthesis
)
in order to book an appointment a message pops up saying I'm entering the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
wrong
password although
Did you mean "I'm"?
i'm
pretty sure
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
it's
the correct one.
Furthermore
, once logged in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
it's
taking ages for me to be able to actually reserve an appointment.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Because
of that, clients are complaining about the long period of time needed to book a service at our place. This
being said
, could you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
a specialist from the IT department to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
fix
the hassle I'm facing as
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
as possible, the reason why is that
Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
it's
effecting the number of booking we are taking per day.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
me know when we could resolve this problem. Looking forward for your reply.
This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
may
Possible spelling mistake found.
wazzan
.
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your manager about a computer system problem that you have encountered and say -Describe the problem - How it is affecting your work -What needs to be done about it

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
199 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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