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Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town, and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. v.2

Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town, and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. v. 2
Dear Neha, How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy. What about the result of your M. B. A course? I am glad to tell you that I have got a distinction in my M. Sc. course and would like you to be present at a party I am throwing to commemorate the event on 25th August. I am planning for a small party at my home this coming Sunday, 25th August. I would like to invite you to the party and I really want to see you on that day. I have invited all our childhood friends, hence it would be a get-together party for all of us. This party will definitely be a good reason to meet. Last year I moved into a new apartment which is in Satellite area of the city and I hope you have my address. It is very easy to find my residence. First, you should reach the Satellite area, main road and towards the left of the entrance, you will find a shopping mall called KH 24; from there you should come straight away and you will find my apartment. I have sent you my coordinates at Google Maps in your email. However, if you have any difficulty in finding my address, just call me. I will send my cousin for your help. See you at the party then. Best wishes, Rahul
Dear
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Neha
,

How are you? I hope you are healthy and happy. What about the result of your M. B. A course? I am glad to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a distinction in my
Consider using a more common abbreviation of this university degree.
M. Sc.
course and would like you to be present at a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
I am throwing to commemorate the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
on 25th August.

I am planning for a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
at my home this coming
Did you mean to refer to the current year? 25th August 2020 is not a Sunday, but a Tuesday.
Sunday, 25th August
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to invite you to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
and I
really
want to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you on that day.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have invited all our childhood friends,
hence
it would be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
-together
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
for all of us. This
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
will definitely be a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
reason to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
.

Last year I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
moved
into a new apartment which is in Satellite area of the city and I hope you have my address. It is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
easy to find my residence.
First
, you should reach the Satellite area, main road and towards the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
left
of the entrance, you will find a shopping mall called
Possible spelling mistake found.
KH
24; from there you should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
straight away and you will find my apartment. I have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
you my coordinates at Google Maps in your email.

However
, if you have any difficulty in finding my address,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
call me. I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
my cousin for your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
See
you at the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
party
then.

Best wishes,

Rahul
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
6Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes
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IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend who lives in another town, and invite him/her to a party you are going to organise. v. 2

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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