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Write a letter to your friend who just moved to a new home with is family, Tell him you are sending a present to him The nature of the present Why you chose the present How you would send it

Write a letter to your friend who just moved to a new home with is family, Tell him you are sending a present to him The nature of the present Why you chose the present How you would send it yXxAP

Dear David, How are you? I hope this letter finds you in good health and spirit. My heart was filled with great joy when I got the news that you have relocated to a new home together with your family. I am sending you a gift and I am sure you would find it valuable. I am sending you a brand new wall clock. It was manufactured in Germany. It is black in colour with some diamond shaped design. It has a light bulb that automatically switches on in the night. It also has an inbuilt battery and a spare battery. I chose this present because it has 5 inbuilt small chambers that gives you the opportunity to set to any five different time zones of your choice across the globe. I would be sending it by mail. I have made an enquiry at the post office in my area. It would be delivered to your location in two weeks. I can't wait to hear from you. Yours Sincerely, David

Dear David,

How are you? I hope this letter finds you in This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
 health and spirit. My heart was filled
 with great joy when I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquired
got
 the news that you have relocated to a new home together with your family. I am sending you a Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).gift, and
gift and
 I am sure you would find it valuable.

I am sending you a 'brand new' seems to be a compound adjective in front of a noun. Use a hyphen: "brand-new".brand-new
brand new
 wall clock. It was manufactured
 in Germany. It is A more concise phrase may lose no meaning and sound more powerful.black
black in colour
 with This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 diamond shaped design. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
It
 has a light bulb that automatically
 switches on in the night. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
It
also
 has an inbuilt battery and a spare battery.

I chose this present This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:due to the factin light of the fact thatowing to the fact that
because
 it has 5 inbuilt This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 chambers that gives you the opportunity to set to any five This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
 time zones of your choice across the globe.

I would be sending it by mail. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 have made an Possible spelling mistake. 'enquiry' is British English.inquiry
enquiry
 at the post office in my area. It would be delivered
 to your location in two weeks.

I can't wait to hear from you.

Yours Sincerely
,

David