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Write a letter to your friend to ask him/her to develop a website for your business.

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Dear Evi, How are you? I hope you and John are doing well. I can’t believe it’s been 2 years since our last vacation together! I have been really busy with the new shop and thanks to word of mouth, sales are going great! In fact, I have even decided to have a website created for the store. Would you be interested in creating the site for me? As you know, my store sells handmade silver jewelry. I have extended the range of products to include other handmade items like ceramic figurines. I want the site to really capture the feeling of the store, which as you probably remember is kind of exotic, with souvenirs from my travels around the world. Since I update my merchandise regularly, the site will need to reflect that. I have recently bought a very high quality camera and some studio equipment so I am able to photograph the products myself. I just need you to set the site up and upload new photographs as they become available. Do you think you can do this? I’d love to hear your thoughts! Of course, I don't expect you to work for free; you'll have to charge me what you would charge any client, regardless of our friendship. I am really excited for this new adventure. I hope to hear from you soon! Love, Jane
Dear
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Evi
,

How are you? I hope you and John are doing well. I can’t believe it’s been 2 years since our last vacation together!

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been
really
busy with the new shop and thanks to word of mouth, sales are going great! In fact, I have even decided to have a website created for the store. Would you
be interested
in creating the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
site
for me?

As you know, my store sells handmade silver jewelry. I have extended the range of products to include other handmade items like ceramic figurines. I want the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
site
to
really
capture the feeling of the store, which as you
probably
remember is kind of exotic, with souvenirs from my travels around the world.

Since I update my merchandise
regularly
, the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
site
will need to reflect that. I have recently
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
high quality camera and
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
studio equipment
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
I am able to photograph the products myself. I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
need you to set the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
site
up and upload new photographs as they become available.

Do you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
you can do this? I’d
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to hear your thoughts!
Of course
, I don't
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expect
you to work for free; you'll
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
charge me what you would charge any client, regardless of our friendship.

I am
really
excited for this new adventure. I hope to hear from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
!

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Love
,

Jane

IELTS letter Write a letter to your friend to ask him/her to develop a website for your business.

Letter
  American English
9 paragraphs
227 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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