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Application letter to Shop headmaster

Application letter to Shop headmaster Bl9m6
Dear sir Said AkhmedovI am writing to apply for a job of shop assistant at your market which I saw advertised in "Darakchi". I am twenty nine years old and experienced in so many popular places. Such as, I worked at some markets and store departaments. Unfortunately, they are so far from my home. In the fact, your market is situated in near my home. I can come on time and go home. As fo me, I am sociable, energetic and I can get on well with people easily. I would be grateful if you could consider me for this job. Your sincerely Nazarova Ozoda
Dear sir Said
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writing to apply for a job of shop assistant at your market which I
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advertised in
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Darakchi
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twenty nine
years
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and experienced in
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many
popular places. Such as, I worked at
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markets and store
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departaments
. Unfortunately, they are
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so
far from my home. In the fact, your market
is situated
in near my home. I can
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come
on time and go home. As
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fo
me, I am sociable, energetic and I can
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get
on well with
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people
easily
. I would be grateful if you could consider me for this job. Your
sincerely
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Nazarova
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Ozoda

IELTS letter Application letter to Shop headmaster

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
104 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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