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Write a letter to the railway company regarding the item you lost on train

Write a letter to the railway company regarding the item you lost on train 0wn6B

DEAR SIR, I JOE ROOT IS WRITING THIS LETTER TO YOU FOR THE FOLLOWING REASON WHICH IS I LOST MY VALUABLE ITEM ON THE TRAIN WHICH I BOARDED YESTERDAY. THE ITEM WHICH I AM TALKING ABOUT IS MY CAMERA. THE TRAIN NUMBER WHICH I BOARDED WAS 027856. THE DEPARTURE TIME WAS AROUND 4 PM FROM LONDON. THE SPECIFICATIONS OF CAMAERA ARE THAT IT WAS NIKON N21 DSLR. IT’S IN THE SIDEBAG WHICH IS BLACK IN COLOUR WITH WHITE STRIPES ON IT. MY SEAT NUMBER WAS F28 NEXT TO THE WINDOW SEAT WHERE I LEFT MY SIDEBAG. I WOULD LIKE YOU TO TAKE SOME SERIOUS MEASURES AS IT CONTAINS MY WILDLIFE PHOTOGRAPHY’S PICTURES WHICH I NEED TO PUBLISH IN A LOCAL MAGAZINE FOR THE UPCOMING WEEK. I HOPE YOU WILL LOOKFORWARD INTO THIS MATTER AND GIVE ME A POSITIVE RESPONSE AS SOON AS POSSIBLE. YOURS FAITHFULLY, JOE ROOT.

DEAR SIR,

Do not use a noun immediately after the pronoun 'I'. Use a verb or an adverb, or possibly some other part of speech.
I JOE
 ROOT IS WRITING THIS LETTER TO YOU FOR THE FOLLOWING REASON WHICH IS I LOST MY VALUABLE ITEM ON THE TRAIN WHICH I BOARDED YESTERDAY.

THE ITEM WHICH I AM TALKING ABOUT IS MY CAMERA. THE TRAIN NUMBER WHICH I BOARDED WAS 027856. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
THE
 DEPARTURE TIME WAS AROUND 4 PM FROM LONDON. Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
THE
 SPECIFICATIONS OF Possible spelling mistake found.Camera
CAMAERA
 ARE THAT IT WAS NIKON N21 DSLR. IT’S IN THE Possible spelling mistake found.Sidebar
SIDEBAG
 WHICH IS BLACK IN Possible spelling mistake. 'COLOUR' is British English.Color
COLOUR
 WITH WHITE STRIPES ON IT. MY SEAT NUMBER WAS F28 NEXT
 TO THE WINDOW SEAT WHERE I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
LEFT
 MY Possible spelling mistake found.Sidebar
SIDEBAG
. I WOULD LIKE YOU TO TAKE This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
SOME
 SERIOUS MEASURES AS IT CONTAINS MY WILDLIFE PHOTOGRAPHY’S PICTURES WHICH I NEED TO PUBLISH IN A LOCAL MAGAZINE FOR THE UPCOMING WEEK.

I HOPE YOU WILL Possible spelling mistake found.
LOOKFORWARD
 INTO THIS MATTER AND GIVE ME A This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:beneficial
POSITIVE
 RESPONSE AS This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
SOON
 AS POSSIBLE.

YOURS FAITHFULLY
,

JOE ROOT. 