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Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable. bYrAl
Dear Sir, On behalf of the residents of Phagwara I am writing this letter to express my appreciation of the plan of opening a swimming pool in our town. Of the two sites you have proposed, the one in the centre of the town would be more suitable. A swimming pool is just what the residents of the town needed. We all know children today are leading sedentary lives and it is difficult to motivate them to play outdoor games when they have so many distractions at home. Swimming, however, is different. Children like swimming and it would give them the necessary exercise also. The location in the centre of the town would be more suitable because children could go there on their own. If the swimming pool is outside the town then parents would have to take their children there. Parents are too busy these days and so most of the times they would not be able to accompany their children. Not only for the children, but also for the adults this site would be more approachable. We appreciate your efforts in this area. Yours faithfully, XYZ
Dear Sir,

On behalf of the residents of
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Phagwara
I am writing this letter to express my appreciation of the plan of opening a swimming pool in our
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town
. Of the two sites you have proposed, the one in the
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centre
of the
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town
would be more suitable.

A swimming pool is
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just
what the residents of the
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town
needed. We all know
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children
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today
are leading sedentary
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lives
and it is difficult to motivate them to play outdoor games when they have
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so
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many
distractions at home. Swimming,
however
, is
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different
.
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Children
like swimming and it would give them the necessary exercise
also
.

The location in the
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centre
of the
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town
would be more suitable
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because
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children
could go there on their
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own
. If the swimming pool is outside the
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town
then parents would
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have to
take their
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children
there. Parents are too busy these days and
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so
Consider using "most of the time" if you mean "usually" or "very often".
most of the times
they would not be able to accompany their
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children
. Not
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only
for the
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children
,
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but
also
for the adults this site would be more approachable.

We appreciate your efforts in this area.

Yours
faithfully
,

XYZ

IELTS letter Write a letter to the local planning committee. A new swimming pool is about to be built in your town, the local planning committee wants all residents to let them know where to place the pool - in the centre of town or just outside the town. Write a letter describing the importance of the pool, the location you prefer and why, explain why the other location isn’t suitable.

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