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Write a letter to the bank manager requesting, for information about the bank loan, write the following -why are you writing the letter -what is the amount of bank loan you need -when you are able to repay the loan

Write a letter to the bank manager requesting, for information about the bank loan, write the following -why are you writing the letter -what is the amount of bank loan you need -when you are able to repay the loan 1r8L

Dear Sir / Madam, I am writing this letter requesting you to provide me some information about availing loan from your bank for starting the restaurant business in the coming month. After few market research I am hoping to establish my own restaurant business few distance away from my home, Apart from this as it would be on the main junction and close to St Xavier’s college, due to which I am expecting to cater almost 2000 students who would be my potential customers for my business. For setting up the restaurant I would be requiring capital of 30 lakh to invest in my business. I would hereby request you to provide me all the necessary information required by you bank, regarding eligibility criteria and the documents required to be submitted along with the application. Furthermore, I would be obliged to inform you there are hardly any restaurant nearby to the school which would be more beneficial for me to earn more profit, So there is chances the I would repay your loan in coming 3 years down the line. Kindly provide me the requested information as soon as possible so the loan application can be processed earliest. Your faithfully,

Dear Sir / Madam,

I am writing this letter requesting you to provide me This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a number of
some
 information about availing loan from your bank for starting the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcoffee shopbardinerjointinnoutlet
restaurant
 business in the coming month.

After few market research I am hoping to establish my This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :possess
own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcoffee shopbardinerjointinnoutlet
restaurant
 business few distance away from my home, Apart from this as it would be on the main junction and close to St Xavier’s college, due to which I am expecting to cater almost 2000 students who would be my potential customers for my business.

For setting up the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcoffee shopbardinerjointinnoutlet
restaurant
 I would be requiring capital of 30 Possible agreement error. The noun 'lakh' seems to be countable, so consider using: "lakhs".lakhs
lakh
 to invest in my business. I would hereby request you to provide me all the necessary information required by you bank, regarding eligibility criteria and the documents required to be submitted
 along with the application.

Furthermore
, I would be obliged
 to inform you there are hardly any You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcoffee shopbardinerjointinnoutlet
restaurant
 nearby to the school which would be more beneficial for me to earn more profit, This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
Did you mean "there are chances"?there are chances
there is chances
Possible typo. Did you mean "the" or "I"?theI
the I
 would repay your loan in coming 3 years down the line.

Kindly provide me the requested information as This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:in the near future
soon
 as possible This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 the loan application can be processed
 earliest.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)Yours
Your
faithfully
, 