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Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter 0oR9
Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my room-mate. As you know we share one room, I can not study in the room at all any more if I still stay there. She always has friend visiting and has parties in the room. They make lots of noise and switch on the radio very loudly, for me this environment is very difficult to study and I need a quiet room. Even borrows my things without asking, it is very impolite. I request you can give me a new room next term because I have been asked her has parties in other place many times they still have parties in the room. I really can not stay in the same room with her. I would be grateful if you could change me a single room. Your faithfully, Catherine
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my room-mate. As you know we share one

room, I can not study in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
at all
Did you mean the adverb "anymore"?
any more
if I
still
stay there.

She always has friend visiting and has parties in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
. They
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
lots of noise and switch

on the radio
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
loudly
, for me this environment is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
difficult to study and I need a quiet

room. Even borrows my things without asking, it is
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
impolite.

I request you can give me a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
next
term
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I have
been asked
her has parties in

other place
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
times they
still
have parties in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
room
. I
really
can not stay in the same

room with her.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would be grateful if you could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
me a single room.

Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,

Catherine

IELTS letter Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
139 words
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text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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