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Write a letter to School principal on School Trip

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Dear Sir/Madam, My daughter Nathania Vincent is studying 9th grade in your school Notre Dame. I was given to understand that school is planning for trip to Singapore. I would like to advocate I want to be part of group to assist the teachers. It is advantageous if parent being part of core group to assist the teachers as they will find challenging managing big class group. In addition, I can help to plan the trip and suggest places of visit as I have been to Singapore many times. I would like to know when is planned trip, how many days, visa processing and accommodation details along with total cost for the trip. Happy to help in all means RegardsVijay
Dear Sir/Madam,

My daughter
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Nathania
Vincent is studying 9th grade in your school Notre Dame. I was
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given
to understand that school is planning for trip to Singapore. I would like to advocate I want to be part of group to assist the teachers.

It is advantageous if parent being part of core group to assist the teachers as they will find challenging managing
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big
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class
group.
In addition
, I can
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help
to plan the trip and suggest places of visit as I have been to Singapore
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many
times.

I would like to know when
is planned
trip, how
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many
days, visa processing and accommodation
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details
along with total cost for the trip.

Happy to
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help
in all means

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RegardsVijay
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IELTS letter Write a letter to School principal on School Trip

Letter
  American English
5 paragraphs
119 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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