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Olympic medal count of countries

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Since the olympics start to be a international event lot of countries started to attend and tried to win medals. As you can see in the chart olympics have 3 types of medals. Gold, silver and bronze. In this report we can see USA got the dominance on all medal types. For example Soviet union's medal count is nearly less than USA's gold medals. After the USA Soviet Union got second place. There is a huge difference between USA and Soviet's count of medal. Also Soviet Union got better results than EU countries like İtaly France UK etc. Except the USA we can see lot of country has similar gold medal count. Maybe reason of this is a different types of sports that countries attended. Maybe population and oppurtinities in USA cause that. but when we have to talk about population; we have China on the chart. China is more populated than all countries listed
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In this report we can
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USA
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the dominance on all
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the USA Soviet Union
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second place. There is a huge difference
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better results than EU
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has similar gold
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attended. Maybe population and
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