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Write a letter to Mr Arjun Singhania manager of a company. Ask some advice about joining the company.

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Dear Mr. Arjun Singhania, I would like to seek your advice about me joining a company in Sec 17 chandigarh I feel this is an excellent opportunity to work for my career growth but still confused as shifting to another location is always risky. I have a settled job and my family here so a bit uncertain with regards to settling down with my family and my kid’s education in the new place. Please advise me if it is the right decision to move with family now or should I move alone. Please help me take this significant decision of my life. You are one person whom I can rely on a perfect choice. I am also attaching a copy of the appointment letter with  Technocodz pvt. Ltd. for you to have a fair judgment of the company. Awaiting your reply. Yours sincerely Mr. N. K. Rawat
Dear Mr. Arjun
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Singhania
,

I would like to seek your advice about me joining a
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company
in Sec 17
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chandigarh


I feel this is an excellent opportunity to work for my career growth
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but
still
confused as shifting to another location is always risky. I have a settled job and my family here
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so
a bit uncertain
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with regards to
settling down with my family and my kid’s education in the new place.

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Please
advise me if it is the right decision to
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move
with family
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now
or should I
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move
alone.
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Please
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help
me take this significant decision of my life. You are one person whom I can rely on a perfect choice.

I am
also
attaching a copy of the appointment letter with
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Technocodz
pvt. Ltd. for you to have a
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fair
judgment of the
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company
.

Awaiting your reply.

Yours
sincerely


Mr. N. K.
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Rawat
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IELTS letter Write a letter to Mr Arjun Singhania manager of a company. Ask some advice about joining the company.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
146 words
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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