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Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and • Give your reason for writing • Tell about your education • Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job.

Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and • Give your reason for writing • Tell about your education • Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job. GrRxg
Dear Mr. Walker, My name is Radhika Saxena and I am writing this letter in reference to the a job opening for the post of Quality Assurance manager I recently came across on the University’s Notice Board. Starting with my Candidature for the same I would like to begin about mentioning my Educational Qualification. I am Currently Pursuing Business Administration from the prestigious University of Loren Brusque. I am Aiming to Grow within the Institution I am Studying at because of the good reputation it holds and the growth opportunities I see in the future. I would like to Highlight the qualities and past work experiences I hold that makes me an Ideal fit for this position. I have worked in the Administration department of my previous school before I planned of pursuing Higher education and hence have a relevant Experience. I am excellent with Computer Skills, Maths, Bookkeeping and have also served as a data entry Clerk. My interpersonal skills are something that will make you interested. I am focused and have a zeal and dedication to learn and work on new things. Additionally, I have done a couple of internships as well in the respective field that I have mentioned about in my Resume. I hereby Request you to consider my candidature for the position being talked about and give me a chance to be a powerful asset for the administration department of the University. Thankyou, Radhika Saxena
Dear Mr. Walker,

My name is
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Radhika
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Saxena and
I am writing this letter in reference to
Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "a" is left.
the a
job opening for the post of Quality Assurance manager I recently came across on the University’s Notice Board.

Starting with my Candidature for the same I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
about mentioning my Educational Qualification. I am
Currently
Pursuing Business Administration from the prestigious University of Loren Brusque. I am Aiming to Grow within the Institution I am Studying at
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because
of the
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good
reputation it holds and the growth opportunities I
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see
in the future.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to Highlight the qualities and past work experiences I hold that
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makes
me an Ideal fit for this position.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have worked in the Administration department of my previous school
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I planned of pursuing Higher education and
hence
have a relevant Experience.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am excellent with Computer
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Skills
,
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Maths
, Bookkeeping and have
also
served as a data entry Clerk. My interpersonal
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
are something that will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
you interested. I
am focused
and have a zeal and dedication to learn and work on new things.
Additionally
, I have done a couple of internships
as well
in the respective field that I have
Did you mean simply "mentioned in"? You do not need the word "about" here.
mentioned about in
my Resume.

I hereby Request you to consider my candidature for the position
being talked
about and give me a chance to be a powerful asset for the administration department of the University.

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Thankyou
,

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Radhika
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Saxena
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IELTS letter Write a letter to Mr. Walker, and • Give your reason for writing • Tell about your education • Describe your work experience and explain why you would be suitable for the job.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
239 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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