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Request about overseas schools to study

Request about overseas schools to study drKMX
Dear SirI would appreciate it if you could give me some information about schools overseas in order to study English. Firstly, I would like to be aware of the specific facilities of that schools what I mean that I would be greatful to study at school which is totally modern. Secondly, I also need an accommodation for my staying. I can say that without any hesitation I don't mind sharing the room with other students but I am really pleased to live near my study place. Finally, my last concern is that the meals which are prepared for vegetarians. Could you give any information about such kind of restaurants or cafes which is located near the school.
Dear
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SirI
would appreciate it if you could give me
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some
information about
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schools
overseas in order to study English.
Firstly
, I would like to be aware of the specific facilities of that
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schools
what I mean that I would be
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greatful
to study at
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
school
which is
totally
modern.
Secondly
, I
also
need
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an accommodation
for my staying. I can say that without any hesitation I don't mind sharing the room with other students
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but
I am
really
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pleased
to
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live
near my study place.
Finally
, my last concern is that the meals which
are prepared
for vegetarians. Could you give any information about such kind of restaurants or
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cafes
which
is located
near the
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school
.

IELTS letter Request about overseas schools to study

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
117 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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