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Write a letter to a manufacturer to ask them to arrange the production of a new item for you. Please say – What item do you need? – Why do you need it?

Write a letter to a manufacturer to ask them to arrange the production of a new item for you. Please say – What item do you need? – Why do you need it? 3aWWw
Dear Sir, I’m writing to you regarding the order of new company’s merchandise tee shirts. I’m very obliged to tell you that we are soon having a member’s tournament in our golf course in the month of September for which we’ll be requiring your company’s made merchandize. As the tournament is to be held in the last week of September we would be having very little time to organize the same on time. Just like before we would be requiring dark blue tee shirts with the small company’s logo on the left. As this time we are organizing a huge tournament we would be requiring 1000 shirts of 200 small size and 400 each of medium & large size tee shirts. I hope our order would be ready on time as before. Please let us know the costing of all these new products. For any further queries, you are free to contact me anytime. Yours faithfully Vaishali
Dear Sir,

I’m writing to you regarding the order of new
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company
’s merchandise tee shirts. I’m
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very
obliged to
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tell
you that we are
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soon
having a member’s tournament in our golf course in the month of September for which we’ll be requiring your
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company
’s made
Consider using the more commonly used "merchandise".
merchandize
.

“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
the tournament is to
be held
in the last week of September we would be having
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very
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little
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time
to organize the same on
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time
.
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Just
like
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before
we would be requiring dark blue tee shirts with the
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small
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company
’s logo on the
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left
. As this
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time
we are organizing a huge tournament we would be requiring 1000 shirts of 200
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small
size and 400 each of medium & large size tee shirts.

I hope our order would be ready on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
as
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before
.
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Please
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let
us know the costing of all these new products. For any
further
queries, you are free to contact me anytime.

Yours
faithfully


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Vaishali
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IELTS letter Write a letter to a manufacturer to ask them to arrange the production of a new item for you. Please say – What item do you need? – Why do you need it?

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6 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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