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am writing this letter to seek your attention towards Mr. Alan, one of your employees at the Indira Gandhi International Airport, who helped me at t

am writing this letter to seek your attention towards Mr. Alan, one of your employees at the Indira Gandhi International Airport, who helped me at t oR55w
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards Mr. Alan, one of your employees at the Indira Gandhi International Airport, who helped me at the airport. First of all, I would like to inform you about the problem faced by me at the airport. After clearing the security check up area at the airport, unfortunately, I forget to pick by my hand bag. I realised about this when I was about to board the aeroplane. Owing to this problem, I informed the employees who were checking boarding passes. They forwarded this issue to the staff working in the security checkup area so that bag can be located. As soon as Mr Alan knew about the lost bag, he started to find the bag. Due to his fast reaction to the problem, bag was founded and delivered to me before the departure of the flight. I want to request you that he should be praised in front of all the employees so that he can feel proud about his work. Apart from this, some reward can be given to him like declaring him the employee of the month. This can also encourage other employees to perform such acts. Hope you will recognise his efforts and praise him accordingly. Yours sincerely Alex Mathew
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to seek your attention towards Mr. Alan, one of your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
at the Indira Gandhi International Airport, who
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me at the airport.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to inform you about the problem faced by me at the airport. After clearing the security
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
up area at the airport, unfortunately, I forget to pick by my hand
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
. I
Possible spelling mistake. 'realised' is British English.
realised
about this when I was about to board the
Possible spelling mistake. 'aeroplane' is British English.
aeroplane
.

Owing to this problem, I informed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
who were checking boarding passes. They forwarded this issue to the staff working in the security checkup area
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that
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bag
can
be located
. As
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soon
as Mr Alan knew about the lost
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
, he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
started
to find the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
. Due to his
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
fast
reaction to the problem,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
bag
was founded
and delivered to me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
the departure of the flight.

I want to request you that he should
be praised
in front of all the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that he can feel proud about his work. Apart from this,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
reward can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
to him like declaring him the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employee
of the month. This can
also
encourage other
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
employees
to perform such acts.

Hope you will
Possible spelling mistake. 'recognise' is British English.
recognise
his efforts and praise him
accordingly
.

Yours
sincerely


Alex Mathew
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IELTS letter am writing this letter to seek your attention towards Mr. Alan, one of your employees at the Indira Gandhi International Airport, who helped me at t

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