Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.
Check Your Text it's free

Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue

Dear Kelly, Sorry, it’s taken me so long to write to you but at last I decided to own up to my mistake and explain why I haven’t returned your new laptop yet. Unfortunately, I haven’t been able to return your laptop to you because it got damaged during my presentation last week. To be honest, I’ve delayed writing this letter to you because I’ve been feeling dreadfully guilty about it all knowing that it was a brand-new laptop. I am so very sorry. Let me explain what happened, everything went well with the presentation until just near the end when I got completely flustered. At that point, I was concentrating so much on what I was saying what I accidentally knocked my cup of coffee which spilled all over your laptop. Since then, your laptop hasn’t worked properly even though I’ve restarted it a number of times. As the laptop just won't work properly, I’ve decided to send it to a specialist I know. Actually, I’ve already talked to him and he assures me that it’ll be as good as new by Wednesday next week which will be in time for your online class that you start on Thursday. Of course, I’ll cover all costs. I can’t apologize enough for what has happened, but please know that it will all get sorted. I hope you can forgive me. Best wishes, Kend
Dear Kelly,

Sorry, it’s taken me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
long to write to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
at last I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
own
up to my mistake and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
why I haven’t returned your new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
yet
.

Unfortunately, I haven’t been able to return your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
damaged during my presentation last week. To be honest, I’ve delayed writing this letter to you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
I’ve been feeling
dreadfully
guilty about it all knowing that it was a brand-new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
sorry.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Let
me
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
explain
what happened, everything went well with the presentation until
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
near the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
when I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
completely flustered. At that point, I was concentrating
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much on what I was saying what I
accidentally
knocked my cup of coffee which spilled all over your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
. Since then, your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
hasn’t worked
properly
even though
I’ve restarted it a number of times.

As the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
won't work
properly
, I’ve decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
it to a specialist I know. Actually, I’ve already talked to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
him and
he assures me that it’ll be as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
as new by Wednesday
next
week which will be in time for your online
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
that you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
on Thursday.
Of course
, I’ll cover all costs.

I can’t apologize
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
enough
for what has happened,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
know that it will all
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
sorted. I hope you can forgive me.

Best wishes,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Kend

IELTS letter Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
231 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • ?
    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • ?
    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
Labels Descriptions
  • ?
    Currently is not available
  • Meet the criteria
  • Doesn't meet the criteria
Recent posts





Get more results for topic:
  • Write a letter to a friend. You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1. Apologize for damaging the product 2. Explain what happened 3. Say how are you going to fix the issue