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Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in

Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in r6OV6

Dear Sir/Madam I am writing to inquire about a publication on Artificial Intelligence. I am John Gresham from Birmingham. I am looking for the latest edition of Artificial Intelligence by Anthony Hopkins which was released last week. The book is still neither available in stores at my place nor online yet. Fortunately one of my peers who was able to get a copy from your store advised me to write to you. I am a research student at the University of Birmingham. The final year project comprises of AI and Machine learning. The concepts in this book provides a deeper insight to robotics which is essential to my project completion. I would be grateful if you can keep a copy of the book for my sake. I can arrange the payment through a bank transfer if that is acceptable or I would not hesitate to visit London store for the purchase. Please let me know the best option. Looking forward to your reply. Regards, John Gresham

Dear Sir/Madam

I am writing to inquire about a publication on Artificial Intelligence. I am John Gresham from Birmingham.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
 am looking for the latest edition of Artificial Intelligence by Anthony Hopkins which was released
 last week. The book is still
 neither available in stores at my place nor online yet
. Fortunately
 one of my peers who was able to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 a copy from your store advised me to write to you.

I am a research student at the University of Birmingham. The final year project Did you mean "comprises" or "consists of"?comprisesconsists of
comprises of
 AI and Machine learning. The concepts in this book provides a deeper insight to robotics which is essential to my project completion.

I would be grateful if you can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :retain
keep
 a copy of the book for my sake. I can arrange the payment through a bank transfer if that is
 acceptable or I would not hesitate to visit London store for the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
purchase
. This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
let
 me know the best option. Looking forward to your reply.

Regards,

John Gresham

IELTS letter Write a letter to a book store manager who is living in another city. Ask him/her to make available a book that you are interested in

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

165 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 6.0

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.5

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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