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write a letter regarding the shortage of sports facilities in your town

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Respected Sir, It is said that health is wealth and very first step to become healthy is regular exercise routine. As a responsible and proactive resident of your town, I am writing this letter to highlight the shortage of sports facilities in our town. As per my suggestion, things like large playgrounds, tracks for cycling and running and a well equipped gymnasium can play crucial role in development of our town. It would act as a one point fitness destination for teen and youth like us. Besides students can also represent our town in state level sports competitions for range of games and outshine hometown on a broader level. On a separate note, 30 mins walk a day is must for burning enough calories in body as per health experts. So Joggers Park would be a good starting point to take this development initiative for our town. Sincerely, Paresh Sarjani

Respected Sir,

It is said
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very
first
 step to become healthy is regular exercise routine. As a responsible and proactive resident of your town, I am writing this letter to highlight the shortage of sports facilities in our town.

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tracks
 for cycling and running and a This word is normally spelled with hyphen.well-equipped
well equipped
 gymnasium can play crucial role in development of our town. It would act as a one point fitness destination for teen and youth like us. Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?Besides,
Besides
 students can also
 represent our town in state level sports competitions for range of games and outshine hometown on a broader level.

On a separate note, 30 Possible spelling mistake found.minutesminmindwinsminemines
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 walk a day is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :require
must
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enough
 calories in body as per health experts. This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
So
 Joggers Park would be a This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
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 starting point to take this development initiative for our town.

Sincerely
,

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IELTS letter write a letter regarding the shortage of sports facilities in your town

Letter

American English

6 paragraphs

149 words

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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

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Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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