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Write a letter of invitation to a friend for a special celebration. In your letter include An invitation for your friend What the celebration is about Travel and accommodation suggestions

Write a letter of invitation to a friend for a special celebration. In your letter include An invitation for your friend What the celebration is about Travel and accommodation suggestions NMePj
Dear James, How're you doing today? I hope you and your family are hale and hearty. I know you're the busy type so I want to inform you in advance that I'll be organizing a party on the 22nd of August and you're specially invited. I'm organizing the party for my 33rd birthday anniversary, and as you already know, I've not been able to celebrate my birthday for the past 10 years because of the nature of my work, hence why I'm considering this year's event very special. Regarding the travel and accommodation, for convenience sake, I'll send a taxi to pick you up from Enugu down to Umuahia on the eve of the program, I'd equally make a hotel reservation for you if you're don't feel like staying in my house. I hope you'll create time from your strenuous schedule and honour my invitation. I'm looking for to seeing you soon. Best wishes, Jay.
Dear James,

How're you doing
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today
? I hope you and your family are hale and hearty. I know you're the busy type
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so
I want to inform you in advance that I'll be organizing a party on the 22nd of August and you're
specially
invited.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
'm organizing the party for my 33rd birthday anniversary, and as you already know, I've not been able to celebrate my birthday for the past 10 years
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because
of the nature of my work,
hence
why I'm considering this year's
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
special.

Regarding the travel and accommodation,
Did you mean "for convenience’s sake" or "for convenience’ sake"?
for convenience sake
, I'll
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send
a taxi to pick you up from
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Enugu
down to
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Umuahia
on the eve of the program, I'd
equally
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
a hotel reservation for you if you're don't feel like staying in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
.

I hope you'll create time from your strenuous schedule and
Possible spelling mistake. 'honour' is British English.
honour
my invitation. I'm looking for to seeing you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Best wishes,

Jay.

IELTS letter Write a letter of invitation to a friend for a special celebration. In your letter include An invitation for your friend What the celebration is about Travel and accommodation suggestions

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
155 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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