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Invention a friend to a public event

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Dear BellaHow are you doing these days? I hope you could finished your project successfully. I am pretty busy to ready for local food festival. Any way, I am writting this letter to invite to attend the festival. I am one of representives of festival and can invite some special guests. As you interest in Iranian food, this time is the best to come Iran and participate in this festival. It is a proper opportunity for you to learn variety things, likes food names, and food tastes. This is an anual event in Tehran, capital of Iran. A number of local people participate in this event. They try to train their local food are even you can taste them. Also you can fallow a recipe and try to make them However it creates a funny time for participation. Never do people go their home, because prefer to go to local concerts. There are a lot of bands. They play local instruments and sign local songs. They usually wear special customs and performance in a group. I know you are flying high after seeing them. I really hope will be able to come. It will not be the same without you. Maryam
Dear
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BellaHow
are you doing these days? I hope you could
The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: "finish"
finished
your project
successfully
. I am pretty busy to ready for
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local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
food
festival. Any way, I am
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writting
this letter to invite to attend the festival.

I am one of
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representives
of festival and can invite
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some
special guests. As you interest in Iranian
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food
, this time is the best to
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come
Iran and participate in this festival. It is a proper opportunity for you to learn variety things, likes
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food
names, and
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food
tastes. This is an
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anual
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event
in Tehran, capital of Iran. A number of
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local
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people
participate in this
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event
. They try to train their
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local
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food
are even you can taste them.
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Also
you can fallow a recipe and try to
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make
them
However
it creates a
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funny
time for participation.

Never do
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people
go their home,
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because
prefer to go to
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local
concerts. There are
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a lot of
bands. They play
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local
instruments and
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sign
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local
songs. They
usually
wear special customs and performance in a group. I know you are flying high after seeing them. I
really
hope will be able to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
. It will not be the same without you.
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Maryam

IELTS letter Invention a friend to a public event

Letter
  American English
3 paragraphs
200 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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