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Write a letter complaining about a shampoo that you bought

Write a letter complaining about a shampoo that you bought oxKWg
I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with shampoo which I purchased from your “New life” department store. I have been a very loyal customer of your company for many years. On Friday I went your shop. Well, of course your company is very nice and there has variety of shampoo. As usual I looked for shampoo which I always use, but unfortunately the shampoo I was looking for was not there. Your shop assistant advised me “Syoss” shampoo and I purchased it. This shampoo is intended for dry hair. However I use shampoo for oily hair. So this shampoo causes many problems. The first problem was my hair was very dry. Another problem was my hair lost its bridle. I do not believe that I am asking for much in return for my time and effort, as all I want is may money back. Besides that I agree that your require amount of money for using the shampoo. I attach a copy of the receipt with this letter your information. I look forward to hearing from you. Your faithfully. Angela
I am writing to express my strong dissatisfaction with
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shampoo
which I
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purchased
from your “New life” department store. I have been a
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very
loyal customer of your
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company
for
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many
years. On Friday I went your shop. Well,
of course
your
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company
is
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very
nice and there has variety of
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shampoo
. As
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usual I
looked for
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shampoo
which I always
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use
,
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but
unfortunately the
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shampoo
I was looking for was not there. Your shop assistant advised me “
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Syoss
”
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shampoo
and I
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purchased
it. This
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shampoo
is intended
for dry
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hair
.
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However
I
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use
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shampoo
for oily
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hair
.
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So
this
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shampoo
causes
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many
problems. The
first
problem was my
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hair
was
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very
dry. Another problem was my
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hair
lost its bridle. I do not believe that I am asking for much in return for my time and effort, as all I want is may money back.
Besides
that I
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agree
that your
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require
amount of money for using the
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shampoo
. I attach a copy of the receipt with this letter your information. I look forward to hearing from you. Your
faithfully
. Angela

IELTS letter Write a letter complaining about a shampoo that you bought

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
181 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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