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Write a job offer letter to a successful candidate for Assistant position

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Dear Mrs Anna, BB Company is excited to bring you on board as Officer. We’re just a few formalities away from getting down to work. Please take the time to review our formal offer. It includes important details about your compensation, benefits, and the terms and conditions of your anticipated employment with BB Company. We are offering a full-time position for you as Officer, reporting to the personnel manager starting on 15th October 2021 at the headquarters 333 Do Quang St. Expected hours of work are six days a week, sometimes work overtime if necessary. In this position, we offer to start you at a pay rate of 15 million VND/month per annual salary. As part of your compensation, we're also offering profit sharing, commission structure based on your ability. As an employee of BB Company, you will be eligible for health insurance, get a 13th-month salary, and travel with your team on vacation time about 2 weak per year. If you become a full-time employee after 3 months of probation, you will enjoy full benefits. Please indicate your agreement with these terms and accept this offer by signing and dating this agreement on or before 10th, October 2021. In the meantime, please don’t hesitate to reach out to me if you should have any questions or concerns, either through email or by calling me directly at 0222 333 444. We are looking forward to hearing from you and hope you'll join our team!
Dear Mrs Anna,

BB
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Company
is excited
to bring you on board as Officer.

We’re
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just
a few formalities away from getting down to work.
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Please
take the time to review our formal offer. It includes
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important
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details
about your compensation, benefits, and the terms and conditions of your anticipated employment with BB
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Company
.

We are offering a full-time position for you as Officer, reporting to the personnel manager starting on 15th October 2021 at the headquarters 333 Do
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Quang
St.
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Expected
hours of work are six days a week,
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sometimes
work overtime if necessary.

In this position, we offer to
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start
you at a pay rate of 15 million VND/month per annual salary. As part of your compensation, we're
also
offering profit sharing, commission structure based on your ability.

As an employee of BB
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Company
, you will be eligible for health insurance,
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get
a 13th-month salary, and travel with your team on vacation time about 2 weak per year. If you become a full-time employee after 3 months of probation, you will enjoy full benefits.

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Please
indicate your agreement with these terms and accept this offer by signing and dating this agreement on or
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before
10th, October 2021.

In the meantime,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
don’t hesitate to reach out to me if you should have any questions or concerns, either through email or by calling me
directly
at 0222 333 444.

We are looking forward to hearing from you and hope you'll
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
our team!
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IELTS letter Write a job offer letter to a successful candidate for Assistant position

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  American English
9 paragraphs
244 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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