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A course is disigned to help improve my memory

A course is disigned to help improve my memory 862bx

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Khanh Ngan, i am a student in grade 11th at Hung Vuong high school. Few days ago, i accidentally saw your advertisement about improving memory course on some of the websites that i accessed. A few months ago, i have trouble remembering and that is reason I am writing to you to inquire about improving memory course. When i was in middle school, i have had a pretty good memory and have memorised many things at once. But until entering high school, assignments is increasing. I am unable to concetrate or remember the present lessons in class because i always have to memorize other lessons. I hope to your memory improvement course can find ways to organize my mind for maximum productivity. First of all, I would like to know how I will be exposed to methods of memory improvement and if the methods are suitable for my age. Could you possibly send more information about methods in the course? Second, I am worried about the fees of the course, I don't know if a student can afford the fees of the course. I would be very grateful if you could tell me what the price is. If possible, could you please send me the dates so that I can invest my time wisely. I look forward to hearing from you without delay. Yours faithfully, Khanh Ngan

Dear Sir or Madam,

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memory
 improvement and if the methods are suitable for my age. Could you possibly
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send
 more information about methods in the course?

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send
 me the dates This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:consequently
so
 that I can invest my time wisely
.

I look forward to hearing from you without delay.

Yours faithfully
,

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Khanh
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Ngan