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Invitation to attend the party for new students

Invitation to attend the party for new students O60Wy
Dear Mr. Luc, I would like to thank you for your invitation to attend the party for new students as well as for giving me an opportunity to sharing my experiences in study abroad on 19th August. Unfortunately, I am unable to attend the party. I believe that this is a great time to greeting you and newcomers, however, on that day, I have to join the essential interview which plays an important role in assessment my qualification for an ongoing internship. I have already asked my prospective company if it would be possible to take the examination on another date, but this is not permitted. In case the schedule of welcome new students is not decided yet, I am pleased to give the talk on next day. I am available on the 20th of August if this day is convenient for you, please let me know. I hope that your party is a great success and look forward to hearing from you, yours sincerely, Luc Nguyen
Dear Mr.
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Luc
, I would like to thank you for your invitation to attend the party for new students
as well
as for giving me an opportunity to sharing my experiences in study abroad on 19th August. Unfortunately, I am unable to attend the party.

I believe that this is a great time to greeting you and newcomers,
however
, on that day, I
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have to
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join
the essential interview which plays an
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important
role in assessment my qualification for an ongoing internship. I have already asked my prospective
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company
if it would be possible to take the examination on another date,
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but
this is not permitted. In case the schedule of welcome new students is not decided
yet
, I am
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pleased
to give the talk on
next
day. I am available on the 20th of August if this day is convenient for you,
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please
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let
me know. I hope that your party is a great success and look forward to hearing from you, yours
sincerely
,
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Luc
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Nguyen
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IELTS letter Invitation to attend the party for new students

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
166 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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