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Write a formal letter of 140-160 words applying for the job. Follow the writing plan in 3

Write a formal letter of 140-160 words applying for the job. Follow the writing plan in 3 K3EBM
I am writing to apply for the job of a volunteer at your Heart to Heart Charity Office. I saw the advertisement on our school notice board last Monday. I have experience of doing office work. Last summer, I had a chance to volunteer at the Happy Mind Charity Centre as a front office worker. There, I received visiting donors and volunteers as well. I saw a volunteer recruitment poster this morning. I have experience in volunteering. Last year I joined the school in charity, I also led some people in my neighborhood to donate money, books, clothes for the needy. I am a positive, dynamic, hardworking, and honest person. I am also very talkative and sociable.
I am writing to apply for the job of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
at your Heart to Heart Charity Office. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
the advertisement on our school notice board last Monday.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have experience of doing office work. Last summer, I had a chance to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
at the Happy Mind Charity
Possible spelling mistake. 'Centre' is British English.
Centre
as a front office worker. There, I received visiting donors and
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteers
as well
.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
saw
a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
volunteer
recruitment poster this morning. I have experience in volunteering. Last year I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
joined
the school in charity, I
also
led
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
in my neighborhood to donate money, books, clothes for the needy. I am a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
positive
, dynamic, hardworking, and honest person. I am
also
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
talkative and sociable.

IELTS letter Write a formal letter of 140-160 words applying for the job. Follow the writing plan in 3

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
117 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
  • ?
    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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